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Attention, please. This Friday evening, April 15, we are going to have a party to welcome a friend came from England. The party will start at seven o'clock and end at ten o'clock. We will hold the party at the school meeting room. During the party, we can do many intreseting activties such as listening to some music, singing songs, dancing and playing a few games. Everyone, please pay attention to it. We will exchange each other's presents, so you should warp it up and remember write down your name after writing some wishes.