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As we all know,the phenomena of shopping online become prevailing in our society.We buy beautiful cloths,telephone,almost everything in our life,through internet. There are several of causes of shopping online.Firstly,there are so many lazy people who want to buy thing without leave home which make he have more time to do what he want.In addition,something online is cheaper than shop.What's more,you can find more goods than shop so that you can find what you like best. In my point of view,every coin has two sides,shopping online is not exception.More customs are cheat by shopping online.Besides,you may find the cloths does conform to you after buying it online. As far as I am concerned,we should think more about the thing which you want to buy online