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Dear Mike, How are you getting on with everything? I’ve got some good news to tell you. I have finally been accepted as Beijing Olympic volunteer and you can hardly imagine how excited I am now. I will work as a guide from August 12 to August 18. In the following days, I will continue improving my English and learning what I should be familiar with as a volunteer. I am determined to make every effort to offer excellent service to all the visitors and athletes then so that they can have an unforgettable time there. I really hope you can come to Beijing to witness such a great event. Yours, Li Hua