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April 20, 2004 Tuesday Fine I've finished my homework so that I made a decision to see a firm.On my way to the cinema,I happened to find a foreigner standing by a road and he looked very anxious.I didn't know what's his matter but I did want to lend him a hand.So I came up to him,asked what's wrong with him.However,unfortunately it seemed that he just couldn't understand me.He also said something but I couldn't get his point either.Finally we had the ability to understand what others are saying by using body language.He wanted to go to Renmin Park.Whereupon,I hailed a taxi for him and told the driver where to go.He thanked me sincerely.Then,I continued my way to cinema and felt good.