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Famous American country music singer John Denver this week in the people's theatre concert, I was very lucky, bought a ticket, this evening to listen to his singing, Denver is America's most famous music singer, a lot of music, he performed in many countries in the world. His songs are often played in the radio and TV, Denver sing beautifully, his song is very beautiful, very natural, although some words I don't understand, but I still can feel the beauty of the countryside from the track of his song. On December 10, 1993, on Saturday, sunny.