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China Spaceflight Hello, everyone, today is a important day,because On January 15, the day after tomorrow at Peking University, professor li must be reported in our academic lecture hall. He will represent the development of China's space,including China's space background, a brief history of development, the development of the shenzhou series of spacecraft and the situation of the Chinese astronauts.Let us welcome Mr.Li.