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My favorite sport My like palying football very much.I love palying football because a chance to let you fall in love with football.That is on the way home found a football, then I play with friends, play from deeply in love with.I often paly football with friend in free time.And I favorite football star is Britain's David Beckham; The biggest wish is to become a professional football player Hope I can come true my dream.