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4. 参考词汇：China dream，come true ,achieve one’s dreams., give up， hold on to, make up of
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MY DREAM Everyone has his dreams. As young students, we have many kinds of dreams. These dreams are our China dreams. The dreams can be very big,or they can also be small. In fact,a big dream is made up of many small dreams. My name’s Li Hong. I also have a dream. I dream of becoming a great scientist. From now on, I have to study hard to achieve my dream. I must learn as much as I can. When I meet any difficulty, I won’t give it up, I must get it over. I’m sure it’s very important to dream,. Some dreams are more realistic,but others are not. No matter what our dreams are, we should hold on to them,and they can just come true one day.
