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MY VIEWS ON ONLINE SHOPPING As we all know,today online shopping has been more and more popular. In my opinion,there is no doubt that online shopping is more convenient than shopping in the real stores.On the other hand online shopping can provide more choices and we can find the things according to our needs.However,every coin has two sides.While online shopping has made our life more convenient,it also has bad effect on us as well as our envirionment.For example,when we see something which is cheap but we do not really need,we may buy it because it is so convenient.As a result,we may spend more money on the things which we do not need.In another aspect,if we buy something on line,it will need some one to deliver our things and if the thing we bought is easy to be broken,we will use many plastics to protect it,it will do harm to our envirionment. Therefore,we should pay more attention to online shopping.And make it more beneficial to our life and our envirionment.