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Encouragement from a friend plays a very important role in motivating you to solve the problems you are facing.At school,frends will Encourage me when I meet difficults that is hard to solve.Encouragement from a friend will make me confident again. Everyone will meet problems,which is hard to face.At the hard time,encouragement helps you fight the difficulties and get out of an unfavorable situation you are stuck in.Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. So we should help our friends who need help.Friendship is one of the most important thing in daily life.