文中词汇表达较恰当,学术词汇表达灵活;作者可适当增加词汇的丰富度,部分句子有错误;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累;连词使用偏少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Notice Jun.12th, Wednesday about "the purpose and use of computer networks for learning project" lecture.Time is on June 14 at 9 a.m. (Friday).Computer enthusiasts can come to listen to free.Location is the building 5 floor conference room.If want to go, please ready to part of the learning problems in advance and ask professor zhang.Welcome your arrival. The League Committee