作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达,一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;衔接成分很少出现,文章结构欠严谨;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
Dear teachers and schoolmates, May I have your attention please? I have an announcement to make. On January 5, Thursday afternoon at 2:30 Beijing university professor li bo to be held in our school a lecture theme is "China's space".Site is in the school hall.Then, the main content of the lecture is the background of China's space development, brief course, the shenzhou series of spacecraft development situation and the situation of the Chinese astronauts. Anyone who's interested in the topic is welcome to attend the lecture. Don't forget to be on time. That's all. Thanks for your attention.