文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些学术词汇;文章在句法方面做的很棒,从句和复杂句的使用不错;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Online Shopping With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is coming into fashion in most of the cities. Now online shopping has become a kind of fashion.Because online shopping is very convenient, you don't have to out of the house can buy what you want, you can also save a lot of time.But online shopping also has bad side.Shopping on the Internet, for example, not sure what you want to buy something of quality.But also can meet the network liar. I think we have to learn to identify the fraud site, discovered to report to him, to prevent more people cheated.
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