词汇表达不够丰富,要增加学术词汇的使用;缺少组织,上下文衔接稍显不流畅;采用了一些简单的从句;请注意分段。
Mark walked into the house.Empty inside, have the wind blew in from time to time, he can't help but feel a trace of fear.To move on but he seems to want to find something.He just went in as far as you not found a corpse, he reported the case to the police at the same time.It involves a homicide, finally the police broke the case, has given his praise.