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December 30, 1999, Tuesday The famous American country music singer John Denver this week held a concert in the people's theatre , you are lucky, bought a ticket, to listen to his singing tonight. Denver is America's most famous music singer, a lot of the record he performed in many countries in the world.His song is often played in the radio and TV. Denver sing beautifully.His song is very beautiful, very natural.Although there are some words I don't understand, but I still can feel the beauty of the country from his singing.