作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累学术词汇;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
Helping Each Other Makes the World Wonderful Hello, everyone. I’m Li Zhi. It’s nice to speak about help here. As is known to all,we often help others and also get help from others in uor daily life. When we help our classmates with their study and other things, we can develop our friendship. If we give a hand to old people, we can understand the meaning of happiness. Helping patients,we can experience the pleasure of giving care and love. I think we can learn more about life when we help the people around us. As the saying goes, “Giving is much better than receiving.” Therefore,let's work together to help each other because helping makes the world wonderful!