文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
Due Attention Should Be Given To the Study of Chinese In the past 5000 years,Chinese culture always led advanced world culture and influenced many kinds of nations even the whole world. But now,the problem that more and more students pay little attention to Chinese study has become serious.They believe that the study of Chinese is of little importance and they have no necessity to learn it.Obviously,this opinion is wrong. I guess one reason is that the western hot is popular.Students are addicted to studying foreign languages,rather than Chinese.Another is teachers in school are not responsible for their students' Chinese learning.If we don't change this situation,our Chinese culture will be dangerous.That is to say our mother language will possibly disappear one day .So we should protect our Chinese and hand it down generation by generation.