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Dear Alex The Mid Autumn Festival is a traditional festival of the Chinese, and has a long history. On that day all the people working out will be back to enjoy the happiness of family reunion in his home, we'll have dinner, but also to drink the full moon, and eat moon cakes. On that day, there is more to warm feelings of home and family love. If you want to come, remember to buy a box of moon cakes, the mid autumn festival night eating moon cakes, is really a kind of enjoyment of life