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Dear editor, With the development of people’s living conditions,more and more people have their own cars. Some of us think it is good to have private cars.Firstly, it is a convenient, fast and comfortable means of trasportation tool. You can go to any places at any time. Secondly, it shows people are becoming richer and the county stronger. It also makes businesses and industries develop faster. However, others have different opinions. They think cars give off waste gas,and pollute the environment. Too many cars will have bad effects,such as more accidents. Besides, parking cars is another problem. Maybe people should think carefully before they buy a car.