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A severe snow storm hit South China around the Spring Festival , keeping many people from returning home. Yet different kinds ed to help them go through the hard time. This reminds me of my experience, which I am quite proud of. On I did. As a middle school student, I think I am more than willing to give a hand to those in trouble. I can help my classmates with their school work; I can help the blind cross the street ; I can give my seat to the elderly. Helping others is a virtue. Only when everyone is always ready to offer help will our world become more harmonious.