作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
Dear Jim, I would like to tell you something about myself.I am a student.I am thirteen years old.I am in Class One,Grade One in No.2 Middle School in Guigang.I like English very much.I think you can help me with my English.There are four people in my family.My father is an office worker and my mother is a Chinese teacher.My sister is a student,too.She is in Grade Two.I have a happy family.Let’s be good friends and help each other. Please write soon. All the best! Yours, Li Hua