加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
I have a good friend.She is beautiful girl.She is very friendiy.sha have black hair and red mouth.She is good song.My good friend like travel,like beautiful cate.She have big eye and high body.She is dance,her very good of danceing.She like pop music!She dream go to abroad!She dream grow up make teacher.