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Online shopping has been increasingly importance to our day-to-day life. There is no deny fact that young people like online shopping more than old peoples.however, just as every cion has two saids, online shoppig an not except both has advantages and disadvantages. It is difficit to say that online shopping is good or not it genenral sa it denpends very much on the situation of people think online shopping is more convenient.