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the Dragon Boat Festival In china, the Dragon Boat Festival is one of the popular festivals, as same as the spring festival. People usually go out and organize games for completing the festival marks which makes people feel happy and relax, that’s the reason why it been known by millians of people. In the Dragon Boat Festival, there’s a tradition, which people usually participate in the game that grabbing for festival marks. It’s so interesting because everything could happen during the game that everyone divided into different groups on the different boats to complete with each group. The group reach reach the marks will be awarded and most importantly, it shows how powerful and team-working they reach the champaign. Watching the game, audiences are excited and support on their favor group. What more, players and audiences are also enjoy the game and that’s the graceful of the Dragon Boat Festival. In conclusion, the Dragon Boat Festival is not only a festival, but also a power which unites and inspires people.
