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the Dragon Boat Festival In china, the Dragon Boat Festival is one of the popular festivals, the same as the spring festival. People usually go out and organize games for completing the festival marks which make people feel happy and relax, that’s the reason why it been known by millions of people. In the Dragon Boat Festival, there’s a tradition, which people usually participate in the game that grabbing for the festival marks. It’s so interesting because everything could happen during the game that everyone divided into different groups on the different boats to complete with each group. The group reaches the marks will be awarded and most importantly, it shows how powerful and team-working they reaches the champaign. Watching the game, audiences are excited and support on their favor group. What's more, players and audiences are also enjoy the game and that’s the graceful of the Dragon Boat Festival. In conclusion, the Dragon Boat Festival is not only a festival, but also the power which unites and inspires people.
