4. 文具方面。
拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;能够使用一些简单的从句;请注意分段。
Dear classmates, Chairman Hu called on the whole society to build China into a saving country last year. As a student, I think that we should set a good example to our parents and friends in this action. First, there is no adult that students should try their best to save money spending on cloths and snacks. Because the most important duty of students is study. In my personal opinion, paying too much attentions to cloths not only waste money and time but also makes us indicated into spending. What's more, water and energy in our earth is limited, if we used water and energy without rule, water and energy would cause a big headache for next generation. In the end, I called all students to make contributes to build China into a saving country.