2012年12月英语四级作文真题:Education pays

文中学术词汇表达比较恰当，但单词拼写不够认真；从句数量偏少，且文中有几处句子错误；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳；可以适当增加副词的使用。

Education pays may good for your career There's a data of Education pays in higher earnings and lower unemployment rates. On the show we can easily see the rate of unemployment and median weekly earning in 2011. Explicitly the person who receive further education have more advantage compared to the people with lower educational background. The unemployment rate of Doctoral degree is 2.5p and the Median weekly earnings is 1551 dollar while the less than high school diploma is 14.1p and 451dollar. We can conclude that the pay for the education is proportional to the gain and social status. The higher educational background may get more security for their job and have more good opportunites of the vacant jobs. Otherwise the lower educatees may lost lots of competitive chances with the higher educatees. For me, if you have a chance to gain further education you should catch hold of it ,which can increase your comprehensive strength and can get the better chance for you.