作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
My good friend is a very lovely boy.He is about three years old,he has short hair,he is medium height ,and a bit of thin,he has two small eyes,a small nose,a small mouth. He likes wearing colorful clothes.He like to listen to the pop music and dancing with the music.Of course, like every child he likes cartoons very much,Everyday he would watch it .