2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

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now everyone need one computer,and work with a computer . computer can be seen everywhere.computers brings a lot of convernce to us. we can listen to singers ,watch viedeos and play games . usually ,we may take a lot of time using computers.we use computers to contact with friends from a lot of distance .