2011年12月英语四级作文真题:坚强的意志

采用了恰当的衔接手法，层次清晰；句子错误偏多，建议修改；文中有较多拼写错误，用词太过单一；请注意分段；连词使用偏少。

some one who want to be sucsed ,the one must have strong will .strong willl is very important to a one who want to be sucssed,in the history one peopel who get a gerat sucsed ,he must have strong will ,as a student we also should have a strong will,we should hard working ,though it we will one day become the great person