文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;作者句法基本功不错,可适当增加从句的使用;文中词汇表达灵活多样,也能较熟练地使用一定的学术词汇。
Nowadays,almost everyone about my age is striving hard to enter s university,since most people believe that going to universtiy is the only way to a brighter future.But as for me,higher education is important but not a must in life,just as a famous saying goes,"All roads lead to Rome." Undoubtedly,a college education will have a positive effect on our professional development if we want to have a career such as law,engineering,chemistry etc.,eapecially in a society to a famous medical college after I leave middle school,as becoming a doctor has been my long time dream. Although it can help us succeed in some way,a college education is not essential to whether we are successful or not in life.For instance,the brilliant movie star,Jacky Chan and the successful businessman,Bill Gates are so remarkable in their particular fields,and yet they did not receieve higher education when young. In conclusion,a college education may be good preparation but not the only means to our future success.