文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;简单句比重过高,另应加强复杂句的练习;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
I have a good friend. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. her voice is better. she is good at singing. She is a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. she is also nice. she often helps us . our classmates like her very much.Dreaming of growing up quickly,a girl wanted to be a teacher.