采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;若注意文中一些句法错误,文章会更不错;文章用词太过单一,且单词拼写错误较多;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;连词使用偏少。
I have a good friend named amanda,we meet in primary school.and our friendship have been for 10 years,she very konw about me ,and i love her so much,even sometimes we quarrel but we always make it up.last term we manage a store together,and it make a lots for me,friendship are precious, we must cherish of frienship