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Nowaday, most people have experienced the shopping online . Increasing the number of online shopping is the result of rapid development of technology. This tendency will keep growth in the future. Online shopping attract people by several advantages: saving time , saving energy, saving money . First , indolent adults can buy items and order food just by click the mouse on the screen instead of hanging out . Moreover, people do not need wast their precious time for important mission from lingering around the Mall. My personal experience convince me that Online shopping is definitely an useful profit . Last summer , I was trying to buy a new cloth ,and I also need attend to summer school . How to get my fascinating cloth and without missing the school was puzzled me . Someone suggested me to try online shopping. I use the internet to order the cloth. Online shopping , which solve my problem . In addition to the benefit of consumers , It also help retailers . they do not need hire many employees , rent large house , which assist them sell items more quickly , more directly , more efficiently. Despite the advantages , online shopping has more drawbacks . Picture on online is not as same as real items , people can not bargain with the owners . Online shopping is become more and more popular in our society . if companies can largely regulate the process of Online shopping ，We are able to enjoy the online shopping .
