单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
This is my school. Look,there is a library in our school. There are some story book in it. They are very interesting. There is a art room in our school. It's on the fourth floor. We can draw many beautiful pictures in it. Of course, there are some classrooms and a playground in our school too.