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Go shopping on the internet is become a fashion now. Go shopping on the windows is a good way to buy things, it is convenient, safety, and it can refuse a lot of time for us. Lots of people especially young people and women,they buy everything through the internet, whatever anywhere. So it's also brings a lot of serious problems to us. It makes some people don't work when they are during working time, make young people dislike study in their classeroom, they only know shopping.What's more, they wasted an amount of money, haven't no money to buy dinner,it's harms to healthy,and will makes people fall ill easier. So, in my opinion,go shopping on the internet have controlled is necessary, we can do it when we are freed but not in working times or study times.
