过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;句法很棒,若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用。
My View on Fake Commodities Nowadays, there are countless fake commodities on the market. They break the market rules and do harm to consumers, such as if people buy a copycat phone in the market. It not only hasn`t authorized edition but also has potential danger. Moreover, genuine phone manufacturers must face the problem of fake phones in the market because of their low price attract consumers to buy them. First of all, manufacturers of genuine products have responsibilities to products which they produced, so the quality of their product must higher than the fake one. Secondly, consumers should not be attracted by the low price of the same commodity, because the same one with a low price might be a fake product. We should purchase a commodity in a standard store rather than buy it in the street. Last but not least, if we find the fake products on sale, we can inform the relative supervising departments immediately. At the same time, we can take a photo of them, and send this picture to the net. We have this duty to prevent more customers from being cheated by the profiteers. Above all, fake commodities have a bad effect on both consumers and society; we should resist them from the market.
人气:71发布:2014-02-02
人气:15发布:2014-11-19
人气:89发布:2015-01-05