作者词汇量积累不错,文中存在一些拼写错误;有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩。
With the development of human society, some subject started and developed, such as Health, Psychology, Science, and Art. Nowadays, there is a topic about whether the government should support Art and artists or not, some people think this is meant to be, while some others claim that there are lots of more important subjects which the government should support, rather than the artists. In my opinion, I belive that the government shoule support artists as well as they support doctors, scientists, teachers. Certainly, artists do not produce products which could change people's life straight away. For example, doctors can cure patients, and teachers can teach students. In another word, what they have done can be tested based on the results, such as the patient become healthy again, and the student passed the exaime. However, artists are also significant for mankind. First of all, artists show love to all of us. From a statue to a painting, we all can see the 'love', which is essencial for all of us. Moreover, artists are the poeple who creat another world besides the real world. For example, Da vinchi' s paintings showed everyone different world, it can be loving, caring, in peace, and in war. Every picture means a special thought which talks to individuals individually. Lastly, human society can not survive without artists. It is hardly can imagine a world with real food, real buildings, real person, and real other things only. Without the artists, our life would be colorness, boring, and dark. In conclution, human cannot live without artists, and of cours, there are many of other careers are as important as them, what we can do it support them equally as this is our world meant to be.
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