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作者词汇基础很好，也能较灵活使用学术词汇，望继续努力；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用。
After many years of urbanization and industrialization , the cities have been changed overall. These revolution have impacted negatively on both animals and plants . Some plants have been wiped out from the map of biology . It is too late to do anything about extinct species . However , If we can take action now, rest of bio-organism will saved. This situation will be largely changed. First of all , due to the industrialization , million of land had been logging, lumbering for factory use . Therefore, the thick forest began to fade off, little by little, the wooden area diminished . As a result, wild animal lost their home , can not find food to feed themselves , exposure to dangerous environment . Moreover, during the process of deprivation of trees. many plants also disappeared as well. Similarly , We may not see those beautiful flora again in the nature. For example, Birds use to live in the forest of Florida , they lived carefree lives , twittering at the dawn serve as if alarms to remind us to get up . But now, everything is no more. We have long time did not hear any melody song from birds, do not see their sight . They became homeless immigrants , groaning for their day at night . All these effect is the fault of humans. In spite of the destruction . Humans still have chance to make up . If we can realize our issue and began to plant the tree from now on . I believe , the birds will come back , everything to restore to origin .
