文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
In 1st,10,2010 the Chinese Chang'e-2 probe was launched in China.The spaceship was the best because no one is better than it. The Chinese engineer made it from the Chang'e-1 probe, but it has more technology. For example, it has a better camera and closer the moon. Like another satellite, it will collect the photos and the rocks that are on the moon.The spaceships mean the Chinese science and astronomy are developing faster and a high level. Now,its performance is adequate. And it will fly over the moon that is for 120 hours.When it completes looking though the moon, we must congratulate it and its maker. I believe that the spaceship will have the better works and sent us more information that belongs to the moon.In spite of this,we must be very careful before it gets down. Bless you,lunar orbiter!