2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用；文章用了较为丰富的词汇，学术词汇略显单薄，同时注意单词拼写的检查。

Now in our daily life, we can see computer where we are.It's very significant what we do everything. whatever we do ,we must play computer,such as work ,study ,shopping and so on.we do believe that computer is very helpful in our life.if there is not computer ,i can't image what the world is like. it make our life is very convicent.making our life colorful. but every coin has two sides.Because of computer,more and more people became lazier. we can do anything what the teacher asked,rather than thinking along.Don't need write homework hardly.but is it have turely good for us.And it is have many bad effect for our health when we watch computer long time. in my opinoin, computer is vritul,but it is not turely what we depend on computer.computer is only a tool in our life,something must do depend on ourselves.