4. 文具方面。
作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;如若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;行为稍欠流畅,过渡词用的还可以;请注意分段。
Dear classmates, Chairman Hu called on the whole society to build China into a saving country last year. As a student, I think we should do it from ourselves. First of more, we should reduce the money of snacks. The snacks not only bad for our bodies but also waste money, it is not scientific. Scond, in the costumes, we shouldn't spend too much money to buy clothes that it's unnecessary, and buy too much makeup. Third, we should reduce some energy, such as water and electricity, energy is important for our life. Last but not least, some things that we use in every day, pens and papers, we could use papers with its double sides.