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托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第6篇:大家庭是不是没以前那么重要了

发布时间:2013-08-07 17:46浏览次数:920
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作文题目:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 

The extended family (such as grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

大家庭是不是没以前那么重要了。不同的人持有不同的观点。

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拼写方面做得很棒,平时练习中注意词汇量的积累;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。

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In the past, most of the people depend on the extended family to help improve their life. However, now the result of the evolution of society is to break the stiff and rigid of the extended family, and people by the single or the group of a few people to improve the development of the society. As to me, I am in favor of the flexible of single or little team. To bolster my stance, I will explore the point as following. First of all, only if hard working, can we succeed. This sentence is used in modern living environment is very suitable. For example, a competent person goes to work in big city, because he has an active thinking ability and avoid effect of his parents`s dull thinking, and there are many opportunities in big city, so a competent person or young person is very easy to survive. The old saying: first alive, then strong. The function of the extended family seems to of no use in this process. Next, it is the most rapid development the same aim several person work together can achieve. The same subject is used to relate people. To avert the trouble of between relatives` interesting, can focus on the goals. In sum, the bloated family is not to fit the modern society. Only the single or little team of flexible ideas can grab the opportunities to improve the development of society.

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