2012年12月英语四级作文真题:Education pays

语句间的衔接不是很自然；可适当增加从句的使用；词汇表达不够丰富，要增加学术词汇的使用。

The graph shows that,the higher education degree,the lower unemployment rate. Some people may think that one should get a higher degree to avoid unemployment But I don't think so Because,firstly,if one has good achievement and then gets a degree,he or she will be much easier to succeed in the interview.Secondly,if one hasn't acquired any knowledge,although he or she gets a degree,it's much harder to be employed. Consequently,I think that unemployment rate does not depend on getting a degree but depends on the achievement acquired in the college.If one wants to be employed he or she should work hard in the school.