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in the high school .the student be in adolescent .a lot violence incident that happened in the high school .it's difficult to management of students. how can we improve school safety . first the school security guard tighten up the management. second teacher is important to education students .and the student parents is important influence it. to communicate more with parents.by the way . the school safety can be inprove