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When ask the question " Should College Student Hire Cleaners?", everyone has his own opinion. As for me, I think college student can hire cleaners when it's necessary. The reasons are as follows. A case in point is that cleaners are good at cleaning the room, we should make full use of one's advantages to do something. What's more, college students have so many things to do every day, they have little time to clean the room. you can imagine that if you're tired after all days work, do you want to do anything when you get home? What's the most important, most college students never clean the room before, if they need do clean now, and they must learn how to do that. This will waste more time. Besides, to this end, there is the clearner. If they do everything on their own, more cleaners will lay off. It will cause more problems. As far as I consider, when it's necessary, college students can hire cleaner. The benefits are immense.
