文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累学术词汇,拼写错误也要注意;行为稍欠流畅,过渡词用的还可以;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩。
It's important for us to great a green campus.The green campus not only refers to green environment but also refers to the quality of students,the atmosphere of reading. So, how the school's students depend on this school wether is green campus or not. In order to make us can learn more knowledge and live in more beautiful environment,everybody of us should take part in build green campus.First of all,we should not threw garbages anywhere,because the garbage will polluting campus environment.The following, we should study hard,because the knowledge can enrich our brain,then makes us more smart.Third,we should dress up,don't wear stange clothes. A good school of environment is need of our everyone's attempt, so let us to contribute the campus.