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About the reporter that six students who shared a dorm at a local university hired a cleaner to do laundry and cleaning once a week and each of them paid her 60 Yuan a month.As far as i am concerned,college students shouldn't hire cleaners.We should do the things by ourself. On the one hand,students are supposed to develop a good habit in the school.We all know that school is a place that educated us how to become a brilliant person.It's also offered a standard of to be a good human.When we at school,we don't have many things to do,just study and some small chore.If college students do the things by themselves,they will experience the happiness.What's more,they will get more compliments from others. On the other hand,college students cann't earn money by themselves,instead of,they used the money from their parents.So college students should save money to reduce the pressure of their parents.Each student should consider for their parents. All in all,college students hire the cleaner is not a wise choice.They should do the thing by themselves and learn to independence.
