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Nowadays,with the rapid developed of society,moer and msomeoer people like to purchase online , purchase online become moer and moer popular To this issue different people have different attitude,most people think that shopping onlineis a convient way of shopping,people can buy they need thing in any time,what is moer ,the things online is cheaper than reality store ,that can save money。but some of people thinkpurchease online is a not safe way。 In my opinion,I support the one view,because I like purcheas online,It can save money andcan buy good things what I need。