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It is necessary that we should contribute to build saving country ,so that we should do this from small things,for instance ,Firstly,we can soon as soon possible eat less snack food ,It is bad to our health,what is moer,eat less snack food can save food.Secondly,we students should wear school uniform everyday,the students should think it is beautiful that wear simply,Thridly,save water and electric is our duty,because water and electric is one time sourance,finally,we should save use our study toy. As far as concern,If we do these ,I believe our live can become moer beautiful!